Cosmos By: Aiden Tomkinson

Cosmos is an extraordinary pony! The reason he is extraordinary, to me he is a challenge. He is also adorable! Cosmos is pretty much my best friend. The reason why is we have that special bond, the one that can’t be broken apart. A horse or pony will only listen to some people, and I listen to Cosmos and Cosmos listens to me.


I think Cosmos is the cutest pony ever! He is small and grey. But he is still learning, and I’ve been training him this summer Cosmos is only 7 years old. I love my pony Cosmos.



Even though Cosmos can only jump 3’3 he is awesome! But I don’t know why Cosmos gets so scared, the jumps can’t come alive and jump out at him. We keep in time, I know him well so I know when he will do something dumb. His most challenging jump is the natural; the natural has trees around it and is 2 feet wide. We’ll figure something out maybe some extra treats before I ride. I’m sure we can do it together.



I wish I could own Cosmos. He is only $3,000 dollars. I hope I get him for Christmas. Cosmos is definitely my favorite pony in the world. I wish he could live forever.
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By: Aiden Tomkinson

Cosmos is an extraordinary pony! The reason he is extraordinary, to me he is a challenge. He is also adorable! Cosmos is pretty much my best friend. The reason why is we have that special bond, the one that can’t be broken apart. A horse or pony will only listen to some people, and I listen to Cosmos and Cosmos listens to me.


I think Cosmos is the cutest pony ever! He is small and grey. But he is still learning, and I’ve been training him this summer Cosmos is only 7 years old. I love my pony Cosmos.



Even though Cosmos can only jump 3’3 he is awesome! But I don’t know why Cosmos gets so scared, the jumps can’t come alive and jump out at him. We keep in time, I know him well so I know when he will do something dumb. His most challenging jump is the natural; the natural has trees around it and is 2 feet wide. We’ll figure something out maybe some extra treats before I ride. I’m sure we can do it together.





I wish I could own Cosmos. He is only $3,000 dollars. I hope I get him for Christmas. Cosmos is definitely my favorite pony. I wish he could live forever. But mymom thinks he isn't as extraordinary as I think he is. Just because he got stitches because he was dumb, and I have fallen off nine times and they were his fault it doesn't get me thinking he is a bad pony. Why can't my mom see that I love him and I think he is extraordinary. One of the biggest reasons Cosmos is extraordinary is he takes care of you, he can sense you if you’re scared. Listen to this if you are really nervous or scared, because you have a lot of nerves in your hands, even if your hands are not on the horse they can sense that and they will flinch and they will get nervous to. If you want to go over a jump you need to stay calm, because if you are scared the horse will get scared to, so if your jumping stay as calm as possible and if you trust your horse the horse will trust you. But if you don't trust the horse it will run right around it. But I trust Cosmos and know how much trust we need in each other. If we have enough trust we will be extraordinary.